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Post by soapyfiedellie on Jan 22, 2005 20:50:34 GMT
Scene One: (The Battesbys house, Chesney and Kirk are watching TV, Cilla and Les are upstairs)
(Chesney keeps flicking through the four channels on the TV)
Kirk: Give it here! (grabbing it off him)
Chesney: Aww I'm so bored
Kirk: Why don't you go and play with that new X box game I got you from that boot sale
Chesney: Kirk, how many times; it won't work- i have a PS2 not an X box. Anyway Mum and Les are- you know.
Kirk: Oh yeh I know, why don't you go and play with Stephany
Chesney: Her names surphie un her Mums grounded her. all she did was let her guinny pig escape, she didn't even like it and it's wrong to keep animals locked up. Her Mums a right old bag.
(door bell rings, Chesney opens it. A fat lady is standing on the door step, with two cases beside her.)
Chesney: hello
Moira: Is this les's house
Chesney: Yeh
Moira: well let me in then, god; your obviously a Battesby sprog
(Chesney doesn't say anything)
Moira: Well can I see Les
Chesney: The thing is, him and me mum are. . .
Moira: Oh why do I bother, do you know a girl called Leanne?
Chesney: Yeh she's Les's daughter, calls me a chinger nutter
Moira: She's my daughter too, where she live?
(Chesney thinks)
Moira: Oh for crying out load. Les Battesby!!!!!!!!!!!!!
(PLEASE CONTINUE)
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Post by Jade on Jan 28, 2005 18:50:40 GMT
Hey! That's brill! That is 1 thing that has always puzzled me about Corrie and I would love it 2 b a storyline! Wot is actually the story bhind Lee's mum, does any1 actually know?
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Post by soapyfiedellie on Jan 28, 2005 20:45:05 GMT
Thankyou so much!
I've actually made a bit of a mistake calling Lee'a mum Moira, her name is actually Babs according to my a little too late recherch in my Corrie books.
Moira was Greg Kellys mum, which is why I got confused.
More will be coming soon but if anyone wants to add a scene, thats absolutely fine with me. Infact please do!
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Post by Clarissa123 on Jan 28, 2005 21:38:17 GMT
personally i think your story is terrible
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Post by soapyfiedellie on Jan 28, 2005 22:23:40 GMT
You really should be carefull what you say Clarissa
I know where you live!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Post by sexybitch on Jan 29, 2005 19:05:37 GMT
hiya soapyfiedellie i agree with stuart i mean erm clarissa it is awful NOT dont listen 2 ur bro oh yeah wish ur gandad a happy b'day from me
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Post by soapyfiedellie on Jan 29, 2005 21:49:24 GMT
thankx I agree, I neva listen to Clarissa anyway
shes a right misereble moooo
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Post by Jade on Feb 4, 2005 18:28:55 GMT
LOL. Does any1 actually know wot happen 2 Leanne's mum or wot the storyline is bhind all this?
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Post by soapyfiedellie on Feb 14, 2005 17:11:29 GMT
yeh i do, i wrote it.
i was hoping people could you know continue, be imaginative.
go on brunolangley- give it a go!
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Post by Jade on Feb 15, 2005 22:27:06 GMT
LOL.  No i meant like in Corrie, not in ure fan fiction. LOL.  Wot me? Er.... Ill try, but I dont think ill b any good... Er... Ill get bk 2 u, with that. One question in ur fiction is Lee's mum called Babs or Moira? |
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Post by Jade on Feb 15, 2005 23:11:06 GMT
SCENE TWO
Les comes rushing down the stairs while franticly trying to get dressed.
LES: For heaven’s sake what is it? Didn’t you realise that ... (Trails off)?
(Looks at Moira and suddenly goes awful pale and stands there with his mouth open)
MOIRA: What’s up? Les surprised to see me? (Walks towards Les) Miss me...
LES: What the flaming heck are you doing here?
MOIRA: Charming that. What a welcome, after all this time.
CHESNEY: Uncle Les, who’s this? She says she’s Leanne’s mum.
KIRK: Is that true?
CILLA: (Suddenly appearing behind Les on the stairs in her dressing gown) Is what true? Eh? What’s going on here, then? And who’s this? (Drawing Moira a dirty look)
LES: Er... Well this is-
MOIRA: Im Leanne’s mum and Les’s ex. And you are? (Looking quite amused)
CILLA: Dont you DARE speak to me like that! Especially in me own home! (Getting angry)
LES: Kirk! Go out will you and take our Chesney with you. (Nodding towards the front door)
KIRK: Eh? Oh! Aye, right come on Ches.
(Both Ches and Kirk leave)
CILLA: WHAT’S GOING ON HERE?! Eh?
LES: Don’t look at me! All I heard was someone shouting me, so I came down and I find her standing here with two suitcases!
MOIRA: I just thought I’d pay you a visit that’s all. And I wanted to see my daughter. (Innocently) Now what’s wrong with that?
LES: WHAT’S WRONG WITH THAT! Don’t you DARE come here to me with that whole caring mother act! Because it won’t fool me!
CILLA: Am I missing something here?
LES: Oh yes! Little miss innocent Moira here walked out on us years ago and left me to bring up our Leanne single-handed.
MOIRA: Single-handed! Yeah, right! Within a year of me ‘leaving’ as you put it. You were married to that common slapper what’s her name?
CILLA: (through gritted teeth) Janice
MOIRA: Yeah that’s it.
LES: Hey! You leave her out of this! She made a ten times better mum to our Leanne, than you ever could be!
MOIRA: LOOK! I don’t wanna spend all day arguing with you Les! JUST tell me where Lee is!
LES: Hey! You stay away fr-
CILLA: She’s lives in a flat round the corner... Er... Better still... Try next door the one to the left as her boyfriend lives there or failing that... try the pub or the caff where she works.
MOIRA: Thanks. Er... What did you say you’re name was?
CILLA: (Annoyed) It’s Cilla.
MOIRA: Well, anyway ta. See you’s later. Oh, yeah... And bye Les.
(Moira leaves carrying her suitcases and slams the front door shut)
(Les looks at Cilla really annoyed)
CILLA: What?
(Les heads back upstairs leaving Cilla by herself, in the living room)
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Post by Jade on Feb 15, 2005 23:14:19 GMT
How's that? LOL. It's my first ever pic of fan fiction, so... Don't expect any miracles.
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Post by eithne on Feb 16, 2005 0:16:37 GMT
Welcome to the club Bruno! That was pretty good. Great characterization for a start! I could easily imagine the scene, as the writing is so good. |
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Post by Jade on Feb 16, 2005 20:44:36 GMT
Welcome to the club Bruno! That was pretty good. Great characterization for a start! I could easily imagine the scene, as the writing is so good. What, really? Cheers. As, I say it was my first piece and i wrote in about 10 mins. I actually really enjoyed writing it. Why, don't u continue the story Eithne? Then, someone else or I could pick it up or woteva. |
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Post by Jade on Feb 17, 2005 20:28:43 GMT
Does any1 wanna continue the story? |
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Post by eithne on Mar 10, 2005 21:15:03 GMT
Part Three ----- Leanne is walking down the Street, with Jamie on her arm an hour later. "You know, I really like you Jamie." "What, are you after something?" "No, we just have a good thing going and I don't want it to change. I really, really like you." Leanne looks across the street as the door of her dad's house opens. Cilla Brown steps out, and runs towards the Rovers. Leanne turns away, and continues heading with Jamie towards Underworld. Fiz emerges from the Rovers and bumps into Cilla. "Mum. What are you doing?" "Nowt. See here, is there a strange woman in there?" "Plenty? What are you up to? You are not schemeing with that strange Yola woman are you?" "It's Yana, and no I ain't seen her since she ran off with a milkman somewhere. He'd got a bit put by on the side, and believed in her powers. Anyway, a blonde woman?" "A blonde woman?" "Is there one in there? I'm looking for Les's ex, Moria." "Why?" "She and Janice don't get on. And neither do she and Leanne, so I wanna see what happens between them." Fiz rolled her eyes and sighed, before walking away. ----- Moira was seated in the bar of the Rovers. An attracive man was stood at the Rovers, and looked down in her general direction. She smiled and he gave her a wink. But as the door opened he quickly looked up at someone else entering the bar. Frankie Baldwin had had a tough day. She was tired. A week ago Warren and "Candy girl" had left after he won a contract with a first division club down in London. So she was really missing him. Also she'd been by herself at the cafe as Vera'd been sick and Roy had been away all day with Hayley for some mysterious reason. Frankie had overheard the factory girls talking about them fostering, so that was probably it. Frankie smiled at her husband as he stood at the bar, looking lonely. "Hiya honey." Cilla Brown entered the Rovers, eager to see what was going on. She was disappointed to see that neither Leanne or Janice were there. Les had filled her in on how much Janice and Moira hated each other, so she wondered if they'd come to blows. Cilla walked over and sat down opposite Moria. She started talking, and soon the two women were deep in conversation. As they spoke Leanne and Jamie were almost at the door of the Rovers, having picked up Jamie's keys from Underworld. Janice had joined them as well, and the three of them headed inside... ----- So how will Leanne react? Will Janice and Moira come to blows? What'll Moira think of Jamie? And further ahead will she and Danny succumb to temptation? Find out when someone else posts part four! |
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Post by eithne on Mar 16, 2005 22:22:19 GMT
(I just copied and pasted this from the other thread, to make it easier for people to catch up. I hope that is okay.) Part Four, written by pearly queen. On entering the Rovers Janice went immediately to the ladies without looking around the pub. Leanne saw Moira at the bar and instantly stormed over. 'Mam! It can't be! What the flaming hell do YOU want?' 'See Les dragged yer up with manners then' Moira replied. 'Lemme look at you..by heck, you're a fine young woman now.' I haven't got any money you know if that's what you're after' Leanne hissed, eyeing her mother's gawdy clothes. Jamie, concerned for Leanne, piped up 'Everything alright, babe? Who's this? Ignoring Jamie, Moira continued 'I've got money, Leanne, I want to make amends, that's all, get to know my little girl. Jamie, unable to stop himself shouted 'You're a disgarce! My own mum left me..it's unforgiveable. You can't just waltz back like that...' Moira:'Who's this scruffy Southern wazzock?' Frankie, who'd been silently enjoying the show, now sprang to life. 'Oi! You leave him alone!' Leanne turned on Frankie 'Trust you to get in on the act - never happy unless you're mouthing off...' Danny Baldwin sighed long-sufferingly and said 'Thought you two had called a truce?' indicating Frankie and Leanne. 'Well I'm calling it off if that mad Essex dog-basket thinks she can have a go at my mother!' Leanne seethed. 'Some mother!' Frankie gloated. Moira took advantage of the chaos to order a bottle of Champagne from a dubious Shelley. She then attempted to be heard above the rowing Baldwins. 'Leanne, please have a drink with me? and of course your FRIENDS (spitting out the last word). Moira handed out Champagne glasses to Leanne and the Baldwins, who were now silenced by the sight of Janice leaving the ladies and approaching the tender reunion with a face like Chinese burn. (Really good I thought! Very funny!  ) |
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Post by Jade on Apr 3, 2005 14:57:04 GMT
God! Thats brill! Eithne and Pearly! Its great! God! Us put me 2 shame! So, is someone else going to continue the story? Or do u guyz mind if i hv another stab @ it? Im really soz in advance if its rubbish... Ill have a go and get back to yous with that...
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Post by Jade on Apr 3, 2005 15:44:11 GMT
Part Five
Everyone in the Rovers suddenly went quiet and turned towards the direction of the ladies at a furious Janice.
Janice: WHAT IS GOING ON HERE THEN?! (Walking towards Leanne who is now looking quite sheepish) THIS ALL LOOKS QUITE COSY!
Leanne: Honest Jan! It isn't what it looks like-
Janice: OH YES! IT BLOODY WELL DOES!
Leanne: If you will just let me explain-
Moira: (Interrupting and looking innocent) What have you got to explain love? (Walking towards Janice with a satisfied look on her face) All you are doing is having a drink with you mum. Now (Facing Janice) what’s wrong with that?
Janice: (Getting even angrier) Ill tell you what's wrong with THAT! You walked out on this girl when she was 10 years old! Leaving Les to pick up the pieces! And, now you just waltz back in here after all this time as if nothings happened! And, think had a bottle of bubbly will sort it all and make everything all right! (Through gritted teeth) It’s not on!
Moira: Oh, yeah? Well, what are you going to do about it, eh? (With a smug look on her face)
Janice: Oh, Ill show you what ill do about it!
Janice jumps forward and grabs Moira by her hair and shoves her forward and she lands with her back down on a table. Janice then jumps on her again and starts laying into her. And, a catfight starts but it’s obvious that Janice is the strongest of the pair.
Shelley: STOP THAT NOW!!!!!!!! CIAREN!
Leanne then jumps in and with the help of Danny and Jamie they all somehow manage to pull an extremely angry Janice off Moira. With Janice still struggling Jamie and Danny hold onto her and pull her out of the way.
Shelley: OUTSIDE NOW!!!!!!!!!! YOU’RE BARRED!
With Janice still struggling Leanne goes up to her:
Leanne: Just leave it will you. Please Jan, for me! She's not worth it!
By this point a shocked and extremely bloody Moira is trying to get up with the help of Tyrone and Ciaren. While, Frankie and Cilla start back looking extremely amused.
Moira shaking, her hair a mess and blood all over her face, eventually manages to get up, but is still holding onto Tyrone. She approaches Janice (Who is still being held by Danny and Jamie) and says:
Moira: Ill get you for this! You just see if I dont! Ill have you done for assault!
Leanne then walks up to Moira.
Leanne: (Laughs) You never change do you, eh? You deserved that! If Janice hadn't have done that I would have done it meself she did me a favour.
Moira: But I thought-
Leanne: (Interrupting) The only reason I stopped her was because you aren't worth an assault charge alright? Which, by the way, there won’t be one will there? (Facing everyone in the pub and being quite threatening) As no one show anything... DID THEY?
Everyone in the pub looks quite sheepish.
Leanne: Good! Now clear off, before I finish the job off meself! Right! (Turning to Jan) Come on!
Leanne leaves the pub, dragging Jan with her.
Leanne: Jay!
And, Jamie follows them out of the pub, leaving a distraught, angry and very embarrassed Moira, a pull full of shocked locals and a very amused Cilla.
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Post by Jade on Apr 3, 2005 15:45:39 GMT
There you go hows that? LOL. Well, thats only my 2nd piece of fan fic, so.... Does anyone else want 2 continue from there?
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Post by pearly queen on Apr 3, 2005 16:55:03 GMT
Excellent, Bruno. This is getting very lively now. Maybe I'll try and do a bit more myself this week, if nobody else minds? This someone else's story that I've hijacked 'cos it looked like a lot of fun!
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Post by Jade on Apr 3, 2005 20:34:27 GMT
Excellent, Bruno. This is getting very lively now. Maybe I'll try and do a bit more myself this week, if nobody else minds? This someone else's story that I've hijacked 'cos it looked like a lot of fun! No, cool. Cant wait to read the rest of it. Thanx 4 the comment. I had a lot fun writing it... No, I dont think anyone will mind. Carry on, cant wait for part six... |
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Post by eithne on Apr 5, 2005 21:01:22 GMT
Yeah, I want to add more but want to wait a while before writing more of the story.
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Post by Jade on Apr 6, 2005 13:17:21 GMT
Yeah, I want to add more but want to wait a while before writing more of the story. How come? Please carry on Eithne. Pearly, or anyone who fancys a go at addind another part to the story please feel free... |
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Post by lauzLUVcraig on Apr 9, 2005 17:07:46 GMT
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No i meant like in Corrie, not in ure fan fiction. LOL. 
Wot me? Er.... Ill try, but I dont think ill b any good... Er... Ill get bk 2 u, with that. One question in ur fiction is Lee's mum called Babs or Moira?
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